Not as strong an effort as your last installment. I'm glad Claire's still mad at him. I'd like to see some humanity in the no-name characters--things don't need to be all black and white. Work on the plausibility of your dialogue and avoid unorganized sentences. Keep it up!

(Gosh, I hope I don't offend you. I'm always so afraid of hurting people when I give constructive criticism. It really is a compliment!)