*squee* Man, they all were very good. I loved the first one, how they were so unexperienced, and I loved Charlie worrying about her and trying to be gentle, trying to make it perfect. I love the final dialogue and the last line, and though I don't approve what she did... well, I totally understand her. Or something close. About the second part... well, I've always liked Charlie fics envolving groupies because, man, it's sex, drugs & rock'n'roll! I really enjoyed reading it, with her classical morning-after desperation and with him starting to act like a 'rockstar' in the bad sense of the word. And in here: “My name’s Jodie.” She said, glaring at him. “Goodbye Charlie.” I could totally imagine her, saying that angrily and then leaving. The third one took my breath away and absolutely made my heart go faster. I could almost feel Charlie's pain and, hell, I wished I was there to kick David's ass over and over again. So that makes it very believable. Good work with slash! The fourth part was also very real and credible. We don't really know much about Lily so everything it's okay for me. She was such a, hm, bitch, and I liked the fact that Charlie realized it too late. And, of course, the last one. It was my favourite. Painfully full of emotions. It made me teary. Poor, poor Charlie. Poor Claire too. Great ♥
Wow, this must had been my longest feedback in an English fic EVER =P
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Date: 2008-04-13 03:01 pm (UTC)Man, they all were very good. I loved the first one, how they were so unexperienced, and I loved Charlie worrying about her and trying to be gentle, trying to make it perfect. I love the final dialogue and the last line, and though I don't approve what she did... well, I totally understand her. Or something close.
About the second part... well, I've always liked Charlie fics envolving groupies because, man, it's sex, drugs & rock'n'roll! I really enjoyed reading it, with her classical morning-after desperation and with him starting to act like a 'rockstar' in the bad sense of the word. And in here:
“My name’s Jodie.” She said, glaring at him. “Goodbye Charlie.” I could totally imagine her, saying that angrily and then leaving.
The third one took my breath away and absolutely made my heart go faster. I could almost feel Charlie's pain and, hell, I wished I was there to kick David's ass over and over again. So that makes it very believable. Good work with slash!
The fourth part was also very real and credible. We don't really know much about Lily so everything it's okay for me. She was such a, hm, bitch, and I liked the fact that Charlie realized it too late.
And, of course, the last one. It was my favourite. Painfully full of emotions. It made me teary. Poor, poor Charlie. Poor Claire too. Great ♥
Wow, this must had been my longest feedback in an English fic EVER =P